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Post by Poetic on Sun Aug 29, 2010 8:32 am

This competition is so amazing. I've had an amazing time reading all of your potions. I don't think I'll win, but it's been a great challenge. Love to you all! Hope you enjoy *drum roll* Beauty.

Beauty
What if the world
Stood hand in hand?
Refusing to fight,
But making a stand.

Hoping for triumph,
Though our hearts hesitate.
A better world
Will not come by fate.

I hope the world joins me
Though now I'm alone.
Will they follow my dream
After my strength is shown?

My angels beside me,
Helping me choose
Which path I'm taking
And which tool to use.

They give me advice
To help me along.
Guiding my way
To help me be strong.

If I'm to join and be one with all,
I must learn how it feels to love.
Alone, by myself, I will surely fall;
Never reaching the world I dream of.

But to love another
I first must love me.
I need to uncover
Some integrity.

Then the world will quickly come;
Peace shining for all to see.
The impossible will be done,
The world will have Unity.


The world and I
Are hand in hand.
Refusing to fight
But making a stand.

Integrity

Love

Unity



ILU





Beauty
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Post by PROUDLIKECOW on Sun Aug 29, 2010 11:23 am

Impetuously beautiful! It's like a personally mystical "Imagine" by John Lennon blended with Gandhi's "be the change you want to see in the world" spiced exclusively by MoonChildren™ herbs. I love it!
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Post by Poetic on Sun Aug 29, 2010 12:34 pm

Gah! Very Happy Imagine is a HUGE inspiration. Thank you soooo much!
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Post by electric_rhino on Sun Aug 29, 2010 2:08 pm

wow, i, i, mmmmm, just, huh, wow.
speechless.

PD. You're absolutely wrong. I think you're the person with the most chances of winning.
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Post by Poetic on Sun Aug 29, 2010 4:02 pm

Very Happy Thanks!

But Iridescent_Revival_<3 had an AMAZING potion. And all the others just had so much emotion and stuff, I don't know if mine can compete. :/
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Post by YetiMoonchild on Mon Aug 30, 2010 1:00 pm

That was so beautiful! Loved it ^^
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Post by Poetic on Mon Aug 30, 2010 1:01 pm

Thank you so much! ^_^
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Post by IgnorantSmiles on Mon Aug 30, 2010 2:39 pm

That was absolutely breathtaking! You'll win for sure! Good luck love ^-^
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Post by cg360 on Mon Aug 30, 2010 3:15 pm

Oh, wow! Beautiful and so true Very Happy

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Post by Poetic on Mon Aug 30, 2010 3:18 pm

Win for sure? I highly doubt that. So glad you liked it though!

Thank you everyone so much!
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Post by pixiedust19 on Mon Aug 30, 2010 5:18 pm

BEAUTIFUL! <3 it!
AWESOME JOB! Very Happy

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Post by Poetic on Mon Aug 30, 2010 5:29 pm

Thank you so much!
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Post by TheBlueJayStar on Tue Aug 31, 2010 8:01 am

woah! this is pretty good!
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Post by Poetic on Tue Aug 31, 2010 5:09 pm

You're not bad yourself. Smile Why don't you post something?
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Post by Krissy on Tue Aug 31, 2010 5:42 pm

very nice

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Post by Poetic on Tue Aug 31, 2010 6:44 pm

Thank you!
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Post by TheBlueJayStar on Wed Sep 01, 2010 8:45 am

Poetic wrote:You're not bad yourself. Smile Why don't you post something?

i dunno. maybe i will.
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Post by Poetic on Wed Sep 01, 2010 7:04 pm

butterflycry2010 wrote:very nice

Thanks! Very Happy

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Post by Iridescent_Revival_<3 on Fri Sep 03, 2010 12:06 am

Poetic wrote:I hope the world joins me
Though now I'm alone.
Will they follow my dream
After my strength is shown?

RAISE YOUR HAND IF YOU'RE A FOLLOWER!!!

*raises hand*



as per usual, your words are gorgeous and eloquent and i wish you the best of luck I love you congrats Razz
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Post by Guest on Fri Sep 03, 2010 9:05 am

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Post by Poetic on Fri Sep 03, 2010 9:14 am

Thanks guys! Very Happy
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Post by Loveisalwaysthere! on Mon Sep 06, 2010 9:15 pm

wow...i wish i was poetic as you I love you i just make simple things up as i go through life or see something special..like a 40 word poem thats all *facepalm*
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Post by cg360 on Tue Sep 07, 2010 5:22 am

Loveisalwaysthere! wrote:wow...i wish i was poetic as you I love you i just make simple things up as i go through life or see something special..like a 40 word poem thats all *facepalm*

Keep writing! You don't get good overnight; it takes time and effort Razz I'm getting my confidence up to posting my song submission. Maybe, today or tomorrow? The admission I was paranoid about putting it out there really helped. Finally, I'm excited to get some feedback!! So, keep writing and remind us how you're doing every so often Wink

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Post by Poetic on Tue Sep 07, 2010 3:53 pm

Just work hard. I've been writing for a long time. And I used to be TERRIBLE until just two years ago, and even then I was pretty bad. I'm sure that for how long I've been writing I should be much better than I am. But I guess I've never received feedback until then, so it just shows how much criticism helps. Smile
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Post by Guest on Wed Sep 15, 2010 8:12 am

This is really great i think you have a great chance!

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Post by Natt on Wed Sep 15, 2010 12:23 pm

Very beautiful

this is my favorite part:

The world and I
Are hand in hand.
Refusing to fight
But making a stand.
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Post by Poetic on Wed Sep 15, 2010 2:23 pm

Thank you so much guys!
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