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Post by OllieAburame on Wed Aug 18, 2010 2:49 pm

My poem about love~ I hope you like it guys~ ^_^

Its the treasure to last eternally,
to have in your heart forever.
So put it in your spirit,
its now or never.
First you need some respect,
something to never lack.
If you put your mind to it,
even if you lose some you'll get it back.
Number two is trust,
something to never bypass.
and if you always have that,
you'll true feelings will forever last.
Last but not least is honesty,
something to always keep at hand.
And If you use it right,
it'll help you across the never ending land.
Finally we have finished,
the masterpiece sent from heaven above.
Oh what is it you say?
Why its nothing other then LOVE.
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Post by butterflycryx3 on Wed Aug 18, 2010 5:22 pm

wow *__* ~ It's amazing! i wish i write something like that.. I need to get on with mine!

Good luck!! ",
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Post by OllieAburame on Wed Aug 18, 2010 5:35 pm

butterflycryx3 wrote:wow *__* ~ It's amazing! i wish i write something like that.. I need to get on with mine!

Good luck!! ",

Thank you do much ^_^ I can't wait to read yours~
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Post by mimi on Wed Aug 18, 2010 11:38 pm

its beautiful, and u know what, i could really imagine it being in a poition book under the 'love potions' Smile

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Post by ghost_flower on Thu Aug 19, 2010 12:16 am

I love it! I could see it too in a potion book Very Happy
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Post by Gretta on Thu Aug 19, 2010 2:29 am

wooooooow *-*
it's like a real recepy xD
it's kidna like you know like... uhhmmm.... you know when like someone is looking for treasure and they have to guess some kinda riddle to get the treasure or something? Very Happy it sounds exactly like it xD
I LOVE it Very Happy
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Post by Lady_Kandrakar on Thu Aug 19, 2010 3:58 am

Wow, this is awesome! Love it! I love you
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Post by OllieAburame on Thu Aug 19, 2010 10:41 am

Thank you all so much ^_^ I can't wait to read all of yours~ I bet they'll be much better then mine Smile
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Post by pixiedust19 on Thu Aug 19, 2010 11:15 pm

mimi wrote:its beautiful, and u know what, i could really imagine it being in a poition book under the 'love potions' :)
i agree. it is not only beautiful, but i could also see this in a potion book x]]

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Post by Guest on Fri Aug 20, 2010 7:41 am

good

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Post by PROUDLIKECOW on Fri Aug 20, 2010 8:50 am

What a divinely appetizing potion! I especially like the order you mixed the ingredients. I hope you don't mind my interpretation: respect for those who came before you, trust in their good intentions all around, and honesty to reflect it back - Love really is as simple as 1-2-3!
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Post by Natt on Fri Aug 20, 2010 1:14 pm

wow. this is so so so beautiful and unique.
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Post by Krissy on Fri Aug 20, 2010 1:32 pm

very pretty

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Post by IgnorantSmiles on Fri Aug 20, 2010 7:19 pm

Omigod, this great.
/jealousssssss
You're actually a good writer unlike me *-*
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Post by mentinfusion on Mon Aug 23, 2010 2:15 am

waahhh! I loved it really! The way you picked the words, the wy they matched! Like a real poem!
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Post by Guest on Mon Aug 23, 2010 7:33 am

wow.good

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Post by Guest on Wed Aug 25, 2010 9:00 am

cool

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Post by Iridescent_Revival_<3 on Fri Aug 27, 2010 10:40 pm

OllieAburame wrote:Finally we have finished,
the masterpiece sent from heaven above.
Oh what is it you say?
Why its nothing other then LOVE.

such a gorgeous ending to a gorgeous poem ^^ you're really good at writing/rhyming! TEACH MEEE xD

good luck <3
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Post by Loveisalwaysthere! on Thu Sep 09, 2010 2:46 am

wow Shocked its absolutley amazing!! i cant wait to read more poems i love this!! good luck Smile
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Post by TheBlueJayStar on Fri Sep 10, 2010 6:01 pm

this is really good!
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Post by OllieAburame on Wed Sep 15, 2010 2:29 pm

Thank you all so much...I started drying when I read these all...no ones ever complimented my writing before....
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Post by Loveisalwaysthere! on Wed Sep 15, 2010 3:56 pm

well i love reading and this is my first time writing anything im use to drawing though..pictures tell stories cant they?
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Post by OllieAburame on Thu Sep 16, 2010 12:41 pm

Loveisalwaysthere! wrote:well i love reading and this is my first time writing anything im use to drawing though..pictures tell stories cant they?

Exactly! I wanna see of your drawings ^_^ I bet you're awesome at drawing~ I suck at it xP
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