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Post by Lady_Kandrakar on Wed Aug 18, 2010 9:24 am

Here is my poem. People say I'm a good writer but I'm not sure. I had a go at this competition and I hope I did well.

You see me everyday,
You judge me on appearance and how I act.
I could judge you on many things but I won’t,
Because I know I shouldn’t.

I see how you act around others,
You’re smiling and laughing,
But inside you’re dying.

I try to help you and show you the way,
You lash back and spit venom,
Telling me I’m a freak,
That I need a life.

You snap at people and show no kindness,
Hiding how you really feel,
Behind a painted mask.

I can see though the mask,
I see what you have and what you are missing,
You are full of anger and hatred,
But you are missing one simple emotion,
LOVE.
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Post by butterflycryx3 on Wed Aug 18, 2010 1:34 pm

Oh that's lovely!! it shows the importance of love when it comes to being happy by showing how you feel when love is absent. It's really beautiful I love you
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Post by Lady_Kandrakar on Wed Aug 18, 2010 1:35 pm

Thank you! I love you
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Post by Natt on Wed Aug 18, 2010 1:37 pm

very beautiful. Good Luck Smile
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Post by OllieAburame on Wed Aug 18, 2010 3:23 pm

Its so pretty~ Its better then mine by a long shot... : )
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Post by mimi on Wed Aug 18, 2010 11:35 pm

I just read your cover letter..
it made my cry Smile for a 14 year old you are VERY insightful.

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Post by Gretta on Thu Aug 19, 2010 2:26 am

wow, it's beautiful!
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Post by Lady_Kandrakar on Thu Aug 19, 2010 2:43 am

mimi wrote:I just read your cover letter..
it made my cry Smile for a 14 year old you are VERY insightful.

Aw, thank you! I love you
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Post by pixiedust19 on Thu Aug 19, 2010 11:13 pm

its wonderful Very Happy i <3 it(:

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Post by Guest on Fri Aug 20, 2010 7:42 am

love it

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Post by PROUDLIKECOW on Fri Aug 20, 2010 8:36 am

This poem does a great job in describing that lack we all too often share. You can be sure you're well on your way to becoming a proliferate writer, anyone less than that could never produce something like this!
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Post by Krissy on Fri Aug 20, 2010 1:43 pm

awesome Very Happy

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Post by YetiMoonchild on Sun Aug 22, 2010 1:56 pm

It was amazing! Hey, you ARE a really good writer! Never stop believing that!
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Post by Guest on Mon Aug 23, 2010 7:36 am

YetiMoonchild wrote:It was amazing! Hey, you ARE a really good writer! Never stop believing that!

yes u sure are my friend!! Very Happy

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Post by Krissy on Wed Aug 25, 2010 6:52 am

good luck

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Post by Guest on Wed Aug 25, 2010 8:55 am

that is like so freakin good..Really hope you win.

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Post by Iridescent_Revival_<3 on Fri Aug 27, 2010 10:28 pm

beautiful_inside20 wrote:
YetiMoonchild wrote:It was amazing! Hey, you ARE a really good writer! Never stop believing that!

yes u sure are my friend!! Very Happy

ditto! you're a great writer! imagine the beautiful poems you'll write when you fully believe in yourself!!

good luck for the competition Smile
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Post by Lady_Kandrakar on Sat Aug 28, 2010 5:14 am

Thank you everyone for your great comments, it has really made my day! Very Happy
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Post by cg360 on Mon Aug 30, 2010 3:23 pm

Lady_Kandrakar wrote:People say I'm a good writer but I'm not sure. I had a go at this competition and I hope I did well.

Very nice, very honest and emotional. How do you feel you did? It may sound cheesy, but it really is the only thing that matters with these sort of things Very Happy

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Post by Lady_Kandrakar on Mon Aug 30, 2010 3:26 pm

I think I may have done alright but I have no chance of winning against all the other entries. They are all longer and compared to them my one looks like I did it in a minute and put no emotion and care into it...
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Post by cg360 on Mon Aug 30, 2010 3:31 pm

Lady_Kandrakar wrote:I think I may have done alright but I have no chance of winning against all the other entries. They are all longer and compared to them my one looks like I did it in a minute and put no emotion and care into it...

Simple is better, in many ways. I wish everyone here could win. You did very well, and I'd say it's actually okay to have nerves. I'm extremely nervous about posting the song lyrics I've written for my submission. It's a wild and crazy ride, but keep it up! You're very honest in your work, very true to yourself. You shine through. You're very talented Smile

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Post by TheBlueJayStar on Fri Sep 10, 2010 6:04 pm

this is really nice.
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