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terrible things lead to death

Post by BubblyLunaDay on Thu Jan 19, 2012 7:35 am

Some things that happen to people lead to them being successful,
but with me?
The girl I once was; was shy,sweet & kind.
Now she's 15 and dead.
She's pretty with brown eyes.
And she died long ago & a monster replaced her inside.
She's cold,evil 7 very destructive.
By day she's dead with roses in hand.
By night she's a beautiful goddess of death.
Like I said "Terrible things lead to death."
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Post by ChiyoLuxuria on Fri Jan 20, 2012 5:30 am

Hmmm...kind of random. Like, what kind of terrible things? Honestly it has to be pretty tragic for a 15 year old to be not just another angsty "waah, poor pitiful me" type. I know that's not at all what you are, but it seems really...dry.


(P.S. Please don't be offended by my criticism. Years of art and writing classes have me trained to give people constructive criticism.)
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Only Angels see me

Post by BubblyLunaDay on Fri Jan 20, 2012 6:49 am

Only angels see me as for who I am,
And I see angels as they really are.

They're are some that are beautiful,
but the again others aren't.

Those that have fallen have little Appeal to me.
"Come join us!,"they say with little dismay,
only I have no wish to join their little game.

"Come play in the GARDEN'S OF HELL,and we'll make sure you're well."
"Begone fallen angels I do not seek ur company."
If only they heard me scream.
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Post by Krissy on Fri Jan 20, 2012 7:49 am

wow.deep

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Post by ChiyoLuxuria on Fri Jan 20, 2012 5:22 pm

Ooh, I like the second one a lot. As Krissy said, deep
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