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Post by Natt on Wed Sep 15, 2010 3:26 am

Love- I wrote about love because this was very interesting for me.I wrote about two types love: good and bad.Also about influence love in our life and find love.




LOVE

This was not a dream
He stolen my life
Here
My breath
My life
This is the end
And
He
Whether he loves me?

Dead silence
Next punch
First tear
Broken bones
The blood
Loss consciousness
Whether I died?

Pain
Suffering
Fear
Hatred
Whatis the love?

Whether love exist?
Why love so hurted?
Why she is so horrible for us?
Victims love
Revive like a Phoenix from the ashes

Why I am a Moon Child?
Whether I desire true love?
I see in magical the Moon
I looking you
I think only about you
You are my dream
I see only you
But he come back
You are my knight
He is so defenseless
I open my eyes
I see all world
Happiness
And
Love
This is not fairy tale
Whether this is reality?

Whether love exist?
Why love so hurted?
How look love?
Whether love is only word?

This is delusion
Circus ilusion
Error
Mistake life
and maybe this is something more?
This is key to happiness
Smile a child
First kiss
Family
Commons dreams
Commons life
Commons plans
Trust

People
Strange the creations
They don't know
What is thelove
But love
This is impeccable
Feeling in heart
Transparent
This is goodness

People
In their hearts
Is only
Anger
Money
Addiction
Evil off all world

People
They don't feel
They buy
Toys
Clothes
Gadgets
Whether this is love?
Whether this is mark?
No!

Love
This is something stronger
Love
Doesn't have a price
Love
This is the best emotion
Love

False love
Tragic love
Unlucky love
First love
True love
Whether love have difference countenance?

Ours hearts desire love
Love is in us
It warrior
Evil or goodness?
Hatred or love?
Reflexion life
When road is better?
When road is difficult?

I don't know what is love
I looking love
But
I know
Love it treasure
Love it life
Love it WE

I.L.U.
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Post by cg360 on Wed Sep 15, 2010 7:20 am

This is amazing! Very touching and very visual; I could see it all playing out in my head. The "smile a child" flashback sequence was really touching, too. I think I actually teared up a bit Smile

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Post by Natt on Wed Sep 15, 2010 7:47 am

cg360 wrote:This is amazing! Very touching and very visual; I could see it all playing out in my head. The "smile a child" flashback sequence was really touching, too. I think I actually teared up a bit Smile

Thank you very much. I thought that I bad wrote..
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Post by cg360 on Wed Sep 15, 2010 8:46 am

KerliKoivPoland wrote:Thank you very much. I thought that I bad wrote..

No, you write very well! As I said, I was able to vizualize the poem as I read it. That's an extremely good sign for a writer!! Keep writing! I'd love to hear your other work Smile

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Post by Natt on Wed Sep 15, 2010 12:09 pm

cg360 wrote:
KerliKoivPoland wrote:Thank you very much. I thought that I bad wrote..

No, you write very well! As I said, I was able to vizualize the poem as I read it. That's an extremely good sign for a writer!! Keep writing! I'd love to hear your other work Smile

Thank you very much for your words, really. I was afraid to write it. I was thinking that everyone will laugh with my English and poem ;( This poem is very about my life and my emotions. I wrote what I felt.
Thanks, my one story is a book Smile
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Post by cg360 on Wed Sep 15, 2010 4:52 pm

KerliKoivPoland wrote:Thank you very much for your words, really. I was afraid to write it. I was thinking that everyone will laugh with my English and poem ;( This poem is very about my life and my emotions. I wrote what I felt. Thanks, my one story is a book Smile

I completely understand! It helps vent your feelings. And, that's always what you need to do; you can't force something like this. Let your heart do the writing Smile And, your English is really quite good Very Happy

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Post by Krissy on Wed Sep 15, 2010 6:44 pm

awesome

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Post by Natt on Thu Sep 16, 2010 6:36 am

Thanks !!
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Post by Iridescent_Revival_<3 on Fri Sep 17, 2010 12:53 am

beautiful Like a Star @ heaven
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Post by YetiMoonchild on Fri Sep 24, 2010 11:06 am

So beautiful!! <3
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Post by Natt on Mon Sep 27, 2010 1:28 pm

thank you very much
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